I may have created too large a cast of characters for Wandering the Web of Worlds. Once Fenlock goes off on his own, I don't think it will be as big of a problem but there isn't a lot for most of the characters to do aboard the Silver Scarab.
Things I'm going to change in the second draft:
- I'm scrapping the Demon's Beard and coming up with something else for the magicians to battle on the moon.
- I need another name for the Black Shells, the Dyson Spheres made of black crystal that contain the suns and planets
- I'll probably change the High Oligarch's appearance and NOT have her reveal her face to Valaric.
- Work more character moments into the narrative.